Friday, 12 September 2014

WALT use varied sentence beginnings and lengths.

The weather beaten boards on our house told it all.Paint was peeling off and barely holding on.Birds sat in the gutter waiting to fall out.

Inside all you could see was old timber and newspaper.The wooden floor was rotting quickly (you could barely stand on it).It had a bathroom.You had to boil the jug and pour it in the bathtub to have a bath because there wasn’t a shower or hot water.But that rotting house was great to live in;it had enuf in my likes;it was perfect.

1 comment:

  1. Chanelle I really like how much description you have put into your work. You have really met your WALT. There is nothing I can say to make your writing better except to maybe put some more short sentences in. But other than that Keep it up and Great Work.